In recent years ,population has increased
therefore people who migrated from the village to the big cities are bigger.In
past cities are not crowded and big but now,cities are crowded and very big
such as İstanbul,Antalya,Londra.Advantages
of big cities has increased.There are a lot of school,jobs,hospital in big
cities therefore it became the focal point of big cities.Some people believe
that living in village better but ın my opinion I think it better to live in
the big city because of several advantages such as entertainment,education,job
opportunities.
The
first advantage is education.Education very important for people.Big cities has
got a lot of university such as İzmir.Students
wants each department in available to these universities therefore students prefer to big cities.Quality
of education is higher in big cities.According to research,approximately 85%
the number of students are more big cities.
Another
advantage is entertainment.There a lot of cafes,pub,disco,concert in big cities.If
you have a good time,you will go out with friend in concert.Night life is
essential.Do you like dancing?or Do you like listening to live music ? If you
answer yes!! You should prefer to big cities.
The
last advantage is job opportunities.Job opportunities are higher in big cities
because there are a lot of company.You can easily find a job.ıf you are
successful you’ll probably get promotion in big cities.Micheal,employer,said’’My
company has been evolving up to now so Employee is very important for my company.’’
To sum
up,It has got a lot of advantages. ıf you want good education, ıf you don’t
want get bored, ıf you want have a fun,you should prefer to big cities.You will
not regret it never.
just choose one: ın my opinion or I think. dont use both of them.
ReplyDeleteın your thesis you mentioned village, so before your thesis you should also talk about village a little.
maybe you can support your topic sentences better by writing more.
some grammar mistakes but not very important.
hımmmm I like this essay. Particulary, 3th paragraph and conclusion paragraph. you strengthen to topics with questions. It's very nice. I wish continued your success :)
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