In recent years,development of technology has
changed a lot of things in our lives such as computer.computer invented in 1936
than ıt has been evolving up to now.In addition to draw attention,games and
other programmes were added.Today there are a lot of games such as
GT,COD,SIMS.Some people believe that computer games are useful but I think it
is not necessary due to several reasons such as waste of time,bad effects on
health,psychological effect.
The
first reason is waste of time.Children like playing computer games because ıt
is very funny however why don’t they prefer to read boks or do their homework?
Children’s families said” children prefer to play computer games to reading.”However
instead of playing games,they should go out their friends.
Another
reason is psychological effect.If children always play computer games They will
be unsocial and irresponsible.Mary,psychologist,said’’Children’s families
should not allow children play computer games for along time.’’Acording to
research, approximately 63% children who played computer game have more
psychological problems.They can not differentitate real world from imaginary
world.
The
last reason is bad effect on health.Computer games are harmful for children
because children might have eye-disorder.They suffer from have backache because
they sit too much.Tom,dietician,said’’ıf children always sit down in front of
computer they’ll be obese.’’
To sum
up,ıf you want your children use time efficiently,ıf you want your children to
have a healthy pschology and ıf you don’t want your children to have health problems,you
should not let your children play to much computer games.
oh my god what are you doing:):)
ReplyDeletethere are not many problems with content and organisation. you have thesis statement, your introduction id from general to specific and you have topic sentences. you used transitions. therefore, your essay is successful.
however,
you can explain how children will become obese by sitting:) maybe you can say: as children don't want to leave their games, they prefer eating fast food because it's quick. thus, it is not healthy and if they continue this, they can have obesity day by day.